Need help knowing if this song is suitable for the rock/electronic industry

I’ve written a song with a fusion of rock and electronic (rap lyrics) and want help identifying my flaws. The biggest flaw I see is that before the song will make it to the chorus, the person listening to it will click to the next track and not be interested. How can I make it exciting but remain true to its originality?

Additional info:
Check out the song I attached. I need the mixer to do some editing, time aligning and vocal tuning before mixing. I don't need the song mastered. I'm hoping to find a good mixer that can work with my limited budget. I don't have a hard deadline for this. The song has less than 10 tracks recorded that need mixing.